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jimini2
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| Posted: Mon Dec 17, 2007 3:37 am Post subject: just a girl and boy |
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Separated by the miles
Not by thoughts or time
Reliving dreams of yesterdays
And wishing you were mine
Remembering a fantasy
Filled with fancy toys
Life was simple
we were young
And just a girl and boy
Time passed and we got older
Watched each other grow
Saw you at a dinner once
With someone I didn’t know
I wondered if you saw me then
And thought of broken toys
Life was simple
we were young
And just a girl and boy
One day we’ll be together
In thoughts, if not in time
And talk about our yesterdays
In verse without a rhyme
Ask each other how life’s been
Did you find your joy?
When life was simple
we were young
And just a girl and boy.
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Morpheus
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| Posted: Mon Dec 31, 2007 7:02 pm Post subject: |
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Brilliant. I loved this. The narrative's got a hint of tragedy about it.
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jimini2
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| Posted: Tue Jan 01, 2008 2:19 am Post subject: |
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thank you! the tragedy was intended at the time. now it is only a memory. |
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DianaDCC
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| Posted: Wed Jan 16, 2008 5:54 am Post subject: |
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I am not one for romantic prose but i like this one. perhaps it is the tragedy i enjoyed i dont know. but it was a nice read. |
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XxfadinghaloxX
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| Posted: Fri May 16, 2008 11:22 pm Post subject: |
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wow really good i enjoyed that alot. really good flow i think you're a very good writer=) |
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